November 16

Revision PowerPoint--I fixed it!

Local Problem Reports--update
1. Kalena/Lexi--graded
2. Rachel/Chris--graded
3. Spencer/Nic--graded
4. Brin/Nick--not sent to me?
5. Luis/Payton--still revising?
6. Jared/(Will?)--still revising?
7. Mark/Zach--still revising?

Mr. Brantley's letter--I asked Nick Griffin to start drafting the letter and import your reports into the letter. Here's the link to it.

Letter Assignments--I think the letter might get written faster and be better if you get new assignments. These assignments are probably NOT the same reports you worked on. I'm doing this because fresh eyes and a fresh perspective can improve writing, and we want to be proud of our letter to Mr. Brantley.

Letter format, salutation, introduction, section headings, conclusion,--Nick Griffin
Editing throughout--Brin

Section 1: Very Tardy Frustrations
1. problem paragraph--Spencer
2. solution paragraph--Will
3. winners & losers paragraph--Jared

Section 2: Dress Code Violations/Distracting Clothing
1. problem paragraph--Mark
2. solution paragraph--Kalena
3. winners & losers paragraph--(more work needs to be done to show understanding for the kids who dress this way; they would be the losers)--Zach

Section 3: Long Cafeteria Lunch Lines
1. problem paragraph--Lexi
2. solution paragraph--Luis
3. winners & losers paragraph--Nic M

Section 4: Split Schedule
1. problem paragraph--Kalena
2. solution paragraph--Lexi
3. winners and losers paragraph--Nick

Additional Research that needs to be done
1. talk to dress code violator kids and write down what they say--Rachel
2. talk to cafeteria ladies about more pay stations and write down what they say--Chris
3. talk to Attendance Office ladies about Very Tardies--Payton

You're doing a good job revising; our communication is getting better and better.