December 1

Revision Strategies
1. Grammar Girl's Quick and Dirty Tips, "How to Write Clear Sentences."
2. Interactive Quiz # 114.
3. Interactive Quiz # 115.
4. Memo sentence revision.

Mr. Brantley's letter

November 29

Pronouns and antecedents
1. Make corrections to one of the memo sentences. Note the problem with singular nouns and their plural pronouns. Grammar Girl audio on this topic.

Revising letter to Mr. Brantley as a class.

November 18

Work on letter to Mr. Brantley in the Writing Lab.

November 16

Revision PowerPoint--I fixed it!

Local Problem Reports--update
1. Kalena/Lexi--graded
2. Rachel/Chris--graded
3. Spencer/Nic--graded
4. Brin/Nick--not sent to me?
5. Luis/Payton--still revising?
6. Jared/(Will?)--still revising?
7. Mark/Zach--still revising?

Mr. Brantley's letter--I asked Nick Griffin to start drafting the letter and import your reports into the letter. Here's the link to it.

Letter Assignments--I think the letter might get written faster and be better if you get new assignments. These assignments are probably NOT the same reports you worked on. I'm doing this because fresh eyes and a fresh perspective can improve writing, and we want to be proud of our letter to Mr. Brantley.

Letter format, salutation, introduction, section headings, conclusion,--Nick Griffin
Editing throughout--Brin

Section 1: Very Tardy Frustrations
1. problem paragraph--Spencer
2. solution paragraph--Will
3. winners & losers paragraph--Jared

Section 2: Dress Code Violations/Distracting Clothing
1. problem paragraph--Mark
2. solution paragraph--Kalena
3. winners & losers paragraph--(more work needs to be done to show understanding for the kids who dress this way; they would be the losers)--Zach

Section 3: Long Cafeteria Lunch Lines
1. problem paragraph--Lexi
2. solution paragraph--Luis
3. winners & losers paragraph--Nic M

Section 4: Split Schedule
1. problem paragraph--Kalena
2. solution paragraph--Lexi
3. winners and losers paragraph--Nick

Additional Research that needs to be done
1. talk to dress code violator kids and write down what they say--Rachel
2. talk to cafeteria ladies about more pay stations and write down what they say--Chris
3. talk to Attendance Office ladies about Very Tardies--Payton

You're doing a good job revising; our communication is getting better and better.

November 8, 10, & 12

Sample Local Problem Report

Finish writing Local Problem Report

Peer Reviews--the following teams should share their Google Doc reports with each other to get comments. You should also share with me (pharline@alpine.k12.ut.us). Be sure to give us editing privileges.

Zach and Mark--Kalena and Lexi
Luis and Payton--Brin and Nick
Spencer and Nic--Chris and Rachel
Jared and Will--Brin and Nick

Revise

November 4

DOL sentence revision

Paragraph activity

Team organization

Google Docs spotlight

Writing Lab--draft Local Problem Report

What is the problem? How do you know it’s a problem?

What is the best solution to this problem and why?

Who loses and who gains from your solution?

November 2

Team Style assignment

Work Log

Create Field Research

Google Doc Report

Conduct Field Research/Create Field research

October 29

Field Research Plan--outline the specifics, including questions for Mr. Brantley

Mr. Brantley interview about your local problem

Complete Field Research Plan